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[Short Story]~ “Miss”tery!! :)

29 Dec

mysterious-woman

He had always been lucky to get what he wanted to have. Me too. There he is now…with her…from where I stand and see, happy and content. Sigh!

He fell in love with me few years ago and how he managed to woo me is still a matter of contemplation. All I can say is that he got lucky, by chance.
He was a charming young man, well settled, hard working and handsome. What more could any woman ask for? What more when there’s everything?
There was hardly anything that I found objectional in his behavior towards me, or towards anyone else for that matter. He loved me, he loved many.
I am a very straight-forward – straight and forward – woman from a middle class educated family. I can share everything, yes anything but my man.
When he proposed, I was surprised but I did make myself clear to him saying that he had to give up being a Casanova like he had been all this while.

I decided to go for it, as I had no other inhibitions in my mind. My mind’s had no inhibitions, its been quick and all clear all the while I have known.
There was not a moment of regret for what I had just committed. There were dreams of a futuristic life running in the mind. I could be me and wild.
It was not easy to be in a position I was. I was not used to it. It was all new for me. The last time it had been easier. I had just been a brides-maid.
That day as I looked into his eyes, I saw a future. I smiled a season. I could see how right I was in what I had done. My mind still had no inhibitions.
I wiped a tear, a tear of joy. I was now looking forward to leading this new life. A life full of happiness, for a thousand years to come. A few more.

~O0O~O0O~O0O~O0O~O0O~O0O~O0O~O0O~O0O~O0O~

He had always been lucky to get what he wanted to have. Me too, yes “Me too”! There he is now…with her…in the grave, happy and content. Amen!

He fell in love with her few months ago and how he managed to woo her, I now understand was simply an art. He got lucky again yes, not by chance.
He was a charming young man, well settled, hard working and handsome. What more could any woman ask for? What more when there’s everything?
There was hardly anything that I found objectional in her behavior towards him or towards me for that matter. I liked her for who she was, *itch.
She was a straight-forward – ok, too forward – woman from my neighborhood who was beautiful enough to push an adrenaline rush, the right way.
When he proposed, I was surprised – yes again. I think that I had not been clear when I had told him to stop messing with other women. He had to go.

I decided to go for it, as I had no other inhibitions in my mind. My mind’s had no inhibitions, its been quick and all clear all the while I have known.
There was not a moment of regret for what I had just committed. There were dreams of a futuristic life running in the mind. I had been wild. Just me!
It was not easy to be in a position I was. I was not used to it. It was all new for me. The last time it had been easier. I had just cleaned up the *itch!
That day as I looked at his closed eyes, I saw a future. I smiled a season. I saw how right I was in what I had done. My mind still had no inhibitions.
I wiped a tear, a tear of joy. I was now looking forward to leading this new life. A life behind those bars, for a thousand years to come. A few more.

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I really don’t know if this will suit the “mystery short-story” contest being conducted in the internal corporate blog. So do not ask me, “Where is the mystery?”…If you end up asking that, it would mean that I am successful in creating a mystified ambience if not actually a mystery. Ask, ask, ask! 😛
Though I had 3 weeks at my disposal, I tried my level best to come up with the plot till the very last moment (about an hour back). It seemed like I kept swinging the racket, but the ball just didn’t happen to be in my court. So I sat down to write with the desktop notepad and my mind – both white and clean. 😀
I finally managed to get what you read up above…phew…seemed like a poem to me….11 lines of almost equal length, used twice in an attempt to create mystery only to be mystified by the mess. Kindly bear this fool (Hindi mein Flower :P). Amen! 😉

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6 Comments

Posted by on December 29, 2008 in Thoughts

 

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6 responses to “[Short Story]~ “Miss”tery!! :)

  1. chriz

    December 29, 2008 at 6:16 pm

    i really liked the view point frommdifferent language..
    first person language and third person narration style.. twaas cool..

    this one rocked

     
  2. Sree

    December 29, 2008 at 7:43 pm

    @ Chriz,

    Cool…nice to know you got the point…a whole lot of ppl at the internal corporate blog didnt! 🙂
    Thanks buddy! 😀

     
  3. Nandhini

    December 30, 2008 at 10:24 am

    Nice reading it once again Sree!
    But the alignment could be same as that na?

     
  4. iselldreams

    December 30, 2008 at 11:20 am

    really mistified me:P

     
  5. amrita

    December 30, 2008 at 6:51 pm

    oi lucky lucky oi , at first i thought wats up with sree , inna senti post 🙂

    quite mysterious 😀

     
  6. Sree

    December 30, 2008 at 8:50 pm

    @ Nandhini,

    hehe…
    Haan…alignment could have been same, but this template allows me just to present it that way! 🙂
    Thanks buddy for liking it! 😀

    @ Isd,

    Hehe…thanks buddy! 😀

    @ Amrita,

    Hehe…senti laga kya…haan first part shaayad…phir brutal hojaata hey! 😉
    Thanks buddy for liking it! 😀

     

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