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[55-Fiction]~Click, Flick and Talk! :)

03 Jun

The Click

He was sitting at his desk, wondering what to do…

It was too late already and he wanted to convey it right away….

He knew that there was no other way to tell her, that he was over with it, with her…

He looked around to see if anyone cared…

He put down his papers.

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The Flick

He looked around to see who was standing where…

He grinned a little to the nearest man, gesturing that he didn’t care…

He had stood his ground until he saw the tall man come running towards him, with a delivery in hand…

Having no choice, he knelt down and sent it out of the stand…Six!

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The Talk

She sat on a bench, shared by a few…

As he stood on the long queue, waiting for it to move…

A lovely evening, together they’d wished to spend…

But they hadn’t expected, each having to be at a different end…

Separated, their eyes spoke in lull…

Till they met again inside, lights being dull…

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These are my first attempts at 55-Fiction…Lemme know how I fared! 🙂

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13 Comments

Posted by on June 3, 2010 in I~do~such~things, Stories

 

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13 responses to “[55-Fiction]~Click, Flick and Talk! :)

  1. aaradhnak

    June 3, 2010 at 9:49 pm

    Click– as i said soo predictable 😛
    Flick– masttt only at lastt line i understood wat u are talking baout 😀
    Talk–
    //Till they met again inside, lights being dull…// So many meanings 😛 so much unsaid 😛 but still cleanly descibed not what i understood rather what you wanted to write 😛

     
  2. Niveditha

    June 3, 2010 at 10:03 pm

    Wow!!! Nice! 🙂
    This is 55*3 fiction! 😛

     
  3. sushobhan

    June 4, 2010 at 1:17 am

    Hey all three were jhakaas…. Enjoyed reading them..

    Btw have read a earlier version of the six vala 55 fiction before on channel one.. 🙂

    I guess it was from annapoorani.. 🙂

    Anyways the last one had a philosophical touch.. beautiful use of the words..:)

     
  4. Amrita Roy

    June 4, 2010 at 10:32 am

    I liked the TALK the best, reminds me of one of my favorite places – The cinema hall 🙂

     
  5. Sree

    June 4, 2010 at 12:19 pm

    @ Aaradhnak,

    Flick – last word u mean? 😉
    Last wala…i wrote with just one meaning 😛 of a couple wanting to watch a movie, separated til they entered the theatre! 😉
    Thanks buddy! 😀

    @ Smarty,

    hehe…yeah…3 is my lucky number (dont ask in wat way! 😉 ) 😀
    Thanks buddy! 😀

    @ Susho,

    Haan kya…Anna ne likha…got to check! 😀
    Thanks buddy for liking all 3 😀

    @ Amrita,

    loooong time! 😀
    Haha…haan fav place! 😛
    Thanks a lot buddy! 😀

     
  6. preeti

    June 4, 2010 at 10:41 pm

    loved flick.. a real googly 🙂 tussi bahut style se likhte ho ji 🙂 keep writing..

     
  7. Sree

    June 5, 2010 at 9:33 am

    hehe…thanks taani partner!! 😀

     
  8. Dishit

    June 6, 2010 at 3:01 pm

    lol 🙂
    liked the first two!
    got only a hint about watching a movie in the third!
    instead of starting with a four or six you started with a three – unusual start to a new innings buddy 😉

     
  9. Sree

    June 6, 2010 at 8:08 pm

    @ Dev-D,
    Haha…yeah…didnt look at it that way!! 😉
    Thanks a lot buddy! 😀

     
  10. Agila

    June 15, 2010 at 6:16 am

    Awesome Sree!! So hard for me to pick a favorite.. But if I were to, it would definitely be ‘The Flick’! 🙂 Closely followed by ‘The Talk’ ‘cos it took me a while to figure out what was going on.. 😀

    Good job! 🙂

     
  11. Sree

    June 18, 2010 at 1:24 am

    @ Agila,

    Talk is a little complicated i agree! 🙂
    Thanks a lot buddy! 😀

     
  12. Preethi

    July 18, 2010 at 10:45 pm

    ‘Talk’ was brilliant!
    //Separated, their eyes spoke in lull…
    Till they met again inside, lights being dull…
    // Nice!!
    Great going buddy 😉

     
  13. Sree

    July 25, 2010 at 11:48 am

    @ Preetz,

    Agreed it was more poetic, but I find it weak…no idea why…but your comment brought a cheer on! 😀
    Cheers 😀

     

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