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[55F: CGC Contest]~The Last Departure…

03 Feb

KING This post is published as an entry for the KING AND QUEEN OF 55F CONTEST – The first ever unique, challenge for the coveted title in micro fiction category. To catch the crowning moments and also be part of future editions and other contests, visit and register at Cafe GingerChai 

 

He stood there on the topmost floor of the building. Looking down, he remembered all the good old days he had spent with her. For a second, he smiled before the thoughts of losing it all clouded his mind. There was no looking back now. He took one deep breath, and entered the lift.

She saw him leave the room with an expressionless face, no remorse whatsoever. Lying on the ground, she remembered all the good old days she had spent with him. For a second, she smiled before the thoughts of losing it all clouded her mind. Taking a deep breath she got up, and latched the door.

The husband swearing at his wife and the wife abusing back – he had seen it all happen over the past so many years that he had been working at their house. He was happy to know that they were getting separated although he had not guessed it before having laced their drinks, with slow poison.

PS: Wanted to name this as “Lift, Latch and Lace” which I thought would kind of let go of the storyline.  🙂 Btw, the sets have 54, 55 and 55 words respectively.

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14 Comments

Posted by on February 3, 2011 in Contests, Stories

 

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14 responses to “[55F: CGC Contest]~The Last Departure…

  1. Niveditha

    February 3, 2011 at 10:36 pm

    Nice! You’ve talent mate- seriously. I could NEVER write a 55-er…

     
  2. Rumya

    February 4, 2011 at 2:29 pm

    The clever wicked valet!! 😉
    Just got rid of the ‘kit-kitties’ and made peace for himself. 🙂
    Hahaha!! 😀
    Lovely lift, latched and laced lines in your 55Fs, Sree!! 😀

     
  3. Writerzblock

    February 4, 2011 at 7:11 pm

    Ha ha, this was a double twist!! Very well done, Sreeram. Wondering why you aren’t in my Reader yet!!! Will remedy that right away.

     
  4. sahana

    February 4, 2011 at 7:35 pm

    now thats like living up to ur name, JS…wat twists!..i am so proud that i named u rite..all the best!

     
  5. mahesh kalaal

    February 4, 2011 at 8:53 pm

    Loved the first and last one….
    the overall weaving is very impressive …
    liked the simple usage of words…

     
  6. Gyanban

    February 5, 2011 at 3:18 am

    Good stuff mate!

     
  7. Tavish{Sensible Bakwas}

    February 5, 2011 at 11:33 am

    That was really good Sree… really good.. keep them coming buddy!

    Cheers!

     
  8. Sudhakar

    February 6, 2011 at 8:00 am

    Awesome stuff dude. Very well written.

     
  9. Devilzangel

    February 6, 2011 at 8:40 pm

    ooohhh wicked @-) :p.

     
  10. Sree

    February 11, 2011 at 4:32 pm

    Thank you all 🙂

     
  11. Vidya Sury

    February 15, 2011 at 11:10 pm

    Cool blog, Sree. Enjoyed reading your 55F!

     
  12. Sree

    April 18, 2011 at 6:19 pm

    Thanks Vidya 🙂

     
  13. tikulicious

    May 11, 2011 at 9:47 pm

    Sorry am late on your blog but what the heck , this story is a killer Sree 😀 loved it. gosh you can now start on a novel. Awesome.

     

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